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With just enough light in the sky to take out

the newspapers of yesterday

and arrange them, padding in

the galvanised bin;

smoke twists

in a neighbour's garden -

I cup hand and call,

remark upon the vagaries of the weather

and the recent tree

felled on Cobb Hill.

 

In response I get a half-turn

and shoulder shrug, grunt

of some approximate affirmative,

and the trudge on bitten concrete

as painted door swings

clicks closed.

I breathe in the settling embers,

arms akimbo, glance to my own,

palm-shadowed indoor.

 

On a locket on the counter

the liquid lurks like summer scent,

but splash it on and I'm burnt

by the cold slip of human heart.

It's him, and it's me,

a day sterilised, caught and labelled;

we're both hung out like the washing

on a dew-flecked

morning line.

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Peter knaggs

Mon 6th Jun 2016 14:12

David, I think this is the poem of the month that I like the best, so far. OK, that's not meritocratic, but I do have good taste, even though I say so myself. Well done, great poem.

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raypool

Wed 1st Jun 2016 11:51

A real smorgasbord of imagery and all in wonderfully descriptive skill.

Ray

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Lynn Dye

Wed 1st Jun 2016 10:16

I love the lines in this poem, too, David. Well written, well done.

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 1st Jun 2016 09:57

Some lovely lines in this David.

With just enough light in the sky to take out the newspapers---the trudge on bitten concrete---we're both hung out like the washing on a dew-flecked
morning line

Whilst I would prefer it tightened up a little, it is undoubtedly an incisive piece of work, well done!





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Jim Trott

Wed 1st Jun 2016 05:16

Hi David. I really like this one. The smell of a fresh early morning, mingled with smoke. The begrudged acknowledgement from the neighbour. Very well written.

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