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PARK BENCH

park bench

with a view

some that sit there

don't see it, mind

with their heads hung low

and a can is left

to prove the point

that their story we'll never know.

◄ A VALE OF TEARS

I WOULD HAVE WAITED ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (6895)

Wed 27th Apr 2016 21:46

Ray,reminded us of a similar one we did back in 2013.

Hamelin man.

Just updated it with one of these-©-which we never used back then.The actual poem opens with the words of your title.

Great poetic minds oft-times think alike-me/wethinks.

Cheers

P&S

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raypool

Wed 27th Apr 2016 20:50

Thanks a lot Lynn. x

Fulsome praise Stu. I was going on to say about old ladies not using them so much and it would have meandered on , so this is the short version. To get poem of the week would be a leg up so to speak, and its very selfless of you to suggest this. I'll pay for a T shirt!

Ray

Lynn Hamilton

Wed 27th Apr 2016 13:39

Hi Ray

Enjoyed very much.

Lynn x

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Stu Buck

Wed 27th Apr 2016 13:17

this is excellent ray. you have cut to a really pressing and philosophical point using brevity as your sword. i have more images in my mind from this small piece than i garnered from the entire issue of poetry review i read yesterday. lets start a campaign for this to be poem of the week. i will print the t-shirts.

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