SOUTHERN ELECTRIC
rockabye lullaby
Southern Electric
in the dark
the sanctioning spark
Waterloo sunset
left behind
briefly forgotten
the daily grind
no man's land
of fretul speed
lives suspended
commercial creed
rockabye lullaby
unholy ghost
dead man's handle
the milepost.
raypool
Thu 19th Nov 2015 21:48
I'm pleased your picked up on this Stu. I sweated over a long dissertation about the Waterloo departure larded with detail but thought it had no power to move. So this is brevity as you say, and I wanted to convey the motion.
I often rewrite brutally to whittle down.
cheers Ray