Clear Out

Angry sirens from the paper shredder

As I make a decision to destroy her,

for what use does she have for me now,

her youth, her hope, her old bank accounts?

The vacuum doesn’t open a gaping maw

There’s scarcely a memory any more

- I can’t mourn someone unremembered.

And so surrender my maiden name.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 7th Nov 2015 17:16

The comment about men not having "maiden names"
reminds us that in other days men were expected to
pay the way and be "head of the family"...any failings
applied to the father's position of responsibility. Even now,
in divorce settlements, it is often judged to be the case
that the husband has the financial obligation to pay for
the perceived loss suffered by the wife when parting
from him as the presumed provider of marital income.

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Alison Smiles

Sat 7th Nov 2015 16:20

Hey - thank you all. A couple of things have become clear to me - firstly men don't have maiden names. Secondly, somehow I haven't quite got across the sense of time having elapsed which I meant to. Might do a bit of a tweak, so thank you, great feedback, great to understand how other people read it.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 6th Nov 2015 16:43

Post-WW2, when my late eldest sister moved to the USA
and married her US armed forces sweetheart, she
retained her maiden name and was thereafter "June Newberry Blanchard". Dignified and respectful of her
previous identity and achievements.

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 6th Nov 2015 13:22

Love the angry sirens!

What could be more traumatic than destroying one's name? Perhaps the reason for such an increase in double-barrelled names these days.

I like the line 3 where you stand apart from the other person seemingly. Two people not one.

The penultimate line confuses a little, as you are obviously remembering her. Good work!

David Moore

Fri 6th Nov 2015 13:11

Alison, I like this as it has a curious tone. The surrendering of a Maiden name suggesting marriage, yet a reluctance to let go of it. I suppose it is also in many ways a step into the unknown adventure, which though exciting can also be full of trepidation.

Although, it seems this is a clear out after that step into partnership has taken place, so maybe there is a secret yearning within the subjects mind.

David

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