I made another's face not mine
a mask of colour to hide behind
I painted lips of ruby red
to frame the lies that would be said
I rouged my cheeks to feign a blush
in skin so tired blood does not rush
eyelashes layered and stuck with glue
eyelids I gave a greenish hue
mascara, black, layered heavy as lace
no trace of truth on a made up face
Thanks Cynthia. Your suggestions do make sense. Thanks for the read and taking the time to comment. Much appreciated as always. Michelle
Well done, much enjoyed. You are so right, just a mask, and most often ugly - just plain ugly - like grasshopper legs and arms - a stick insect on body-destroying stiletto knives.
Consider:
'mascara, black, layered like lace
no trace of truth in a made up face'.
It runs sharply to your conclusion, without the bumps in 'layered heavy as lace', and still says, I think, exactly what you want. It also pulls the 'ay' sound through the last two lines unimpeded, like punches to your final point. Just a thought.
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Harry O'Neill
Sat 18th Jul 2015 14:38
Oh..girls...stop it! (we don`t believe a word)