I Am God
I am God
God is you
God is science;
nature too.
God’s out there
God's in here
God is reaching
far and near.
People think God’s
this or that
but I think God
wears every hat.
And I don’t need
to read a book
I simply need to
stop and look.
Comments
Travis Brow
Fri 20th Mar 2015 07:46
Hello Natalie, I'm always reluctant to suggest changes. I don't want to ever appear didactic. That said, I reckon your poem's stronger now. Incidentally, you left a comment on my page last December - ''Take it and scooter?!'' What does it mean? Or am I missing something obvious?
Keep it coming.
Thu 19th Mar 2015 08:07
Hi Nat, I agree with this one, nicely put xx
Travis Brow
Thu 19th Mar 2015 07:30
I like this Natalie; pantheism is as close as i'll ever get to religious faith. I'm assuming this is what you're alluding to. I particularly like the third verse. One thing though; if you dropped the 'and' from the fourth line, and used appropriate punctuation after the preceding word 'science', it would scan better. Cracking title as well.
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Steve Higgins
Tue 24th Mar 2015 04:45
Short but very sweet! Nice . .