I was Young
I saw with disregard this gloom that dawned on me
With youthful bliss and innocence
I fooled myself to faith and hope in hopelessness
I saw yet I chose not to see
A chance to go came not just once or twice but more
I just ignored them pass me by
Consumed by pride and ego I have just ignore
That clouds of gray have shut my eye
Now here I am at lost with nowhere else to go
As much as I want to return
I know that I could not but rather just forgo
Now is the time for me to turn
To go elsewhere I’ve never been
To see a sight I’ve never seen
Ally Aly
Thu 19th Mar 2015 13:29
As being a younger site user I see very mature writing material here. It has kinks, however those can be all worked out. This piece in particular is very powerful. In fact as a music artist myself I see potential for maybe even a piece of contemporary music. A few alterations of the words, maybe put it into more relatable context for the public and you might have yourself a real piece of art!
- Ally Aly.