swim on a sunset cloud into tomorrow
dot the stars with eyes
forget yesterday's sorrow and drown in the moment
spring gives us summer to our step
perhaps there's life out there afterall
***
the moon is blooming
as hash rocks plummet to the floor
like comets
to whatever lays beside my feet
[ copyright owen calvert 2009 ]
Hi Owen, Liked this one, dot the stars with eyes
is a great line... Win
<Deleted User> (5646)
Sat 2nd May 2009 13:55
Hi, tried to find your profile but it's a bit like looking for a needle in a haystack. Sorry for the cliche there. :-)
I think it's because of the drowning sensation as well as the hash rocks falling like a comet.
I saw lava in the imagery, please don't ask me to explain my imagery, it often varies from other peoples. I like the poem but it does make me feel a little strange. I tend to feel rather than think too much about the words. That is how i climb inside a poem. :-)
Janet.x
<Deleted User> (5646)
Sat 2nd May 2009 12:41
How odd, i got a plummetting feeling reading this poem. Was that intentional?
Janet.x
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Ann Foxglove
Tue 24th Nov 2009 12:19
I like this too - spring gives us summer to our step - ;-)
You seem to spend your time either up a mountain with a dragon or stuck in some nightmare railway carriage - and I guess a tube train is a bit like a dragon tho not as much as a steam train puff puff