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Hitman

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I dial him up,
An unlisted number, of course
But easy enough to find
When you know where to look.
He speaks low, and slow,
I tell him what he needs to know,
No more. Not too much.
He books me in. Half-four.
Simple stuff - a time, a place, the door,
The colour, the number, the floor outside.
Then the target, to mark it,
Rough age, hair colour?
Height, weight, creed?
But no more. Not too much. No need.
But of course, remind him which door!
I give them over, lower my voice.
Slower, again, so that he knows for sure.
Payment is easy, no need to worry,
It'll be with the victim, I say,
I know where they'll keep it today.
Safe code and all, in the wall.
He takes down the digits.
How will you do it? I ask.
That's not my concern apparently,
And a shame really,
It'd be handy to know it,
Give me a sense of it, revel in it
Before it occurs, but no words,
Not to worry. No hurry,
I'll find out anyway, today.
So I thank him for his time.
Unresponsive, he kills the line.
That's fine, now to wait
'Til it's done. The time goes quick;
Half-one,
Half-two,
Half-three,
Then a defining knock
At my door,
Half-four - such the professional,
And look at that,
Right on schedule.

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Simon Austin

Fri 4th Oct 2013 17:23

Quite right, thanks for the spot (and all the comments) :)

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 4th Oct 2013 15:33


I like the way this midway between poem and short gangster story like thing is so completely in charge of itself. And the way it makes you read it again to look for any clues as to whether it`s suicide or not.

The doubt about what the knock is for makes that last line dramatic.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 4th Oct 2013 09:26

I liked this, nice use of rhyme throughout, and an interesting idea. Good build up of tension, and leaving the reader to wonder...who? Has the writer planned his own death? A strange form of suicide? Or maybe that's just me. I like that it's open to that interpretation, anyway.

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