Atop the coop this crested king
Painted coat and clip-ped wing
Awakened by his morning call
His hen harem, a fowl thrall
Breast out-thrust, majestic stance
Feathered beau, strutting dance
What elegance he does exude
To entrance his aim, this exalted dude.
Thank you very much for the comments; they were much appreciated.
I agree about that last stanza I think it would `strut` more if the lines were shorter.
(I like the possibilities of the `fowl thrall`Is this boss guy captive and henpecked by a bevy of less than beautiful ladies?) Neat though.
Cute. Check your rhythm of the second stanza; a couple of changes would work wonders and keep the humour strong.
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<Deleted User> (8730)
Mon 26th Aug 2013 22:14
This my favourite so far - good description of a rooster - would have liked to have seen a couple more verses though...