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This Crested King

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Atop the coop this crested king

Painted coat and clip-ped wing

Awakened by his morning call

His hen harem, a fowl thrall


Breast out-thrust, majestic stance

Feathered beau, strutting dance

What elegance he does exude

To entrance his aim, this exalted dude.

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<Deleted User> (8730)

Mon 26th Aug 2013 22:14

This my favourite so far - good description of a rooster - would have liked to have seen a couple more verses though...

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Sat 15th Jun 2013 12:30

Thank you very much for the comments; they were much appreciated.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 14th Jun 2013 22:04

I agree about that last stanza I think it would `strut` more if the lines were shorter.

(I like the possibilities of the `fowl thrall`Is this boss guy captive and henpecked by a bevy of less than beautiful ladies?) Neat though.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 13th Jun 2013 17:45

Cute. Check your rhythm of the second stanza; a couple of changes would work wonders and keep the humour strong.

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