Gus Jonsson

We Are Missing You

by Gus Jonsson

Sunday 24th March 2019 10:23 am (first posted Wednesday 5th June 2013 12:41 pm)

We Are Missing You

We are missing you

The cold still air wonders where you are

A bottle of wine, chilling, waiting

Anticipating your salivations

Nipper ever listening

His white coat glistening

Vigilance rewarded

Afforded to his masters voice

We are missing you

The quiet bedroom wonders where you are

The fleur of Scotland, spread waiting

Anticipating sweet aspiration

Scheurich Keramik stand tall like soldiers

Roped by light

Brightens into my closed fast eyes

Lest I blink and all vestige of you was but a dream

Lost and gone forever

◄ Dark Night

In The Time It Takes ►

Comments

barrie singleton

Tue 22nd Oct 2013 02:32

Rich use of language Gus; great expression.
Thanks for kind words a few years back. Power to your muse.

Isobel

Thu 6th Jun 2013 18:29

I love ya too!

I still prefer:

Lest I blink and all vestige of you was dream

but I'm not going to argue about it!!!!!

:)xx

Gus Jonsson

Wed 5th Jun 2013 13:35

Hello Isobel

You are so right... amended straightway... damn it all youare correct in your assumption regarding the bedspread...

what a girl you are!!!!

Hope to see you soon

Loveya ta bits
Gus xx

Isobel

Wed 5th Jun 2013 13:11

Hi Gus - and we've missed you too!

I like this one - lovely internal rhyme and good use of end rhyme without being a slave to it - you feel the void good and proper. Would the fleur of Scotland be on a bedspread or a bedstead by any chance? ;)

I think you could make your penultimate line smoother by getting rid of 'all but' avoiding the repetition of all.

Sorry to be picky but I know you'll forgive me xx

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