seen through the columns of rising smoke

the intention couldn't be clearer


while the tattooed roads wear the organic stains

as footholds for a memory of fallen phosphor rain


yet more caustic the harvest we reap

from the drone-grown, crone wept bones

even as the stone groves grow over the dead hope of

the pebble eyed children in their dreamless sleep


suffer the children our selfish gains

our bloody games


always the children


◄ Itchy

Bone ►


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Julian (Admin)

Sat 20th Apr 2013 22:00

Paul, I find this extremely powerful. As Cynthia says, the Oh sounds dominate. Shades of Theroux's the 'O' Zone.

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Paul Sands

Sat 20th Apr 2013 17:04

Cynthia, thank you so much for your kind words

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 20th Apr 2013 14:22

I like this - powerful diction for emotive images - so laden with the sound of 'oh', it is surely intentional, like groaning? 'crone wept bones' and 'pebble-eyed children' are very innovative expressions.

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Paul Sands

Wed 17th Apr 2013 01:35

thank you Stella

<Deleted User> (6315)

Tue 16th Apr 2013 23:33

Really strong...and really good too. :)

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