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wrong side of thirty

was it part of his childhood
that kept him from walking with the few
people that you connect with
part of the problem
his stubborn fixation
on a lonely world alone
as outstretched arm occasionally offered
the olive branches
the grateful would snap off
she offered a world of love
yet rejected
by a crusade
part of childhood, had made him
the saddened form
the hulk of stone born
in a world his first cries rejected
even the midwife
apparently protested
when greeted with his first expression frown
always in the grip of a winter inside
a hidden heart of love
down
as though broken,  a picture tortured
he hung in a gallery
and he stared
to the pavement
and he walks as though a shy boy
but when prodded with the rights words
seemed to liven up, to sparkle
as though a chemical concoction
a top a Bunsen’s flame
the flickers of hope
in the broken smile
soon to falter, fleeting, fumbles awkward
in the presence of woman
testing every lovers patience
how long can they stand
all his complications
its no as though they are not trying
but when inside a boy is dying
they leave him
the wrong side of his thirties

◄ superb world of positivity

Concorde over St Catherine s Dock 1981 ►

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Francine

Fri 8th May 2009 23:33

Ooh là là... j'aime ça aussi Pate...
j'ai plein de choses à dire, mais pas écrit dans un message...

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winston plowes

Fri 6th Feb 2009 11:43

And so. to spend pre 30's life as a boy/man you find other persuits and interests instead of the opposite sex. The transition is then a difficult one, into a man/boy. And yet there is hope that if this transition can be survived the outcome can be successful esp. if an understanding partner can be found. It is hard to say goodbye to the boy.

Arthur Conan Doyle once wrote -

I have wrought my simple plan
If I give one hour of joy
To the boy who's half a man,
Or the man who's half a boy.

Win x

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sun 25th Jan 2009 13:18

Yes it is very touching. Speaking from a womans point of view.
I think we all like to see the boy inside the man.
It makes him more appealing somehow and then....
There's always a twist.

Love your poem Peter.
Janet.x

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shoeless

Sat 24th Jan 2009 18:13

i know a few people who could identify with the feelings i read in this poem . Its very touching in its quietness.

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Andy N

Sat 24th Jan 2009 17:57

Not what I was expecting Pete from this, but I like it.. Have you read this out live yet? Would be interested to hear people's reactions certainly

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