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Going knowing gone

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(party blues)

I didn't know that she was leaving

nor was I told that she had gone

that my not knowing of her going

meant I was now the only one

she had left me alone not knowing

I was not the wanted one

so they watched as she was leaving

then they knew that she had gone

she was leaving in the knowing

that they watched in her going

as they knew she wasn't staying

I was left the only one.

 

words and foto T Carroll

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 21st Jan 2013 14:46

Neat!

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Mon 21st Jan 2013 05:24

I was going to stay with knowing but now I'm not so sure. Well, should I go and leave it 'cos I wanted somewhat more? ta muchly, nick.

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 20th Jan 2013 23:00

Ah windmills - I love that song.
Not being too quixotic are we?

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 20th Jan 2013 12:33

Concentric circles. Or is it ever decreasing circles? And are you still there?

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