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Hole

amidst this company of billowed ghosts

the echo bed of swollen heads belies

a gory hail of  rain chined inspiration

for my chiselled host and

hides cathedral vaulted cuts

of the deepest time

where darkness sparks

in resonant rhyme

and breath affords a gaudy boast

yet dies upon the budding lime

belly crawled while underneath

the aven’s insolent draught

or razor sliced upon it’s cusp

of undesired attraction

no hiding place from sightless haste

or haven in forsaken sound

for once your light extinguishes

that fear which breeds in ageless seams

wont presume yourself invisible

while in the company of billowed ghosts

feardarkcavecavingspelunkingprimal

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Paul Sands

Sun 30th Dec 2012 22:35

Yes Yvonne that is unacceptable on my part and shall be remedied :)

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 30th Dec 2012 22:26

I prefer some help through punctuation to see exactly where the author is headed but a lack thereof does make for interesting interpretations of where the caesura may lie, however I make an impassioned plea for all apostrophes to be incuded.

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Paul Sands

Sun 30th Dec 2012 21:32

Thank you Philipos. Most of my work is that way, deliberately so.

Philipos

Sun 30th Dec 2012 21:10

Paul, certainly a good read & a new word (chined) to add to my knowledge bank. Actually I quite like the lack of punctuation & capitals. Well done.

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Paul Sands

Sun 30th Dec 2012 19:38

Punctuation, yes Graham, guilty as charged. I've been living on the advice I heard on tape from a certain Mr Hughes and really shouldn't :) Many thanks for your kind words

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 30th Dec 2012 15:33

I really liked this Paul, although being a fan of punctuation (sometimes a dirty word in poetry I know) I found some of it hard to read and keep in rhythm with. The words spill well onto the page. Well done!

Graham

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