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Looking After You

The stabilisers are squeaking and your head is still 

too tiny for your helmet. We’re taking aim

at August and the cycle turns as clockwork

as a comet. Your new parents have had previous

experience of life-limiting illness;

but they haven’t a dog, frogs in a pond

or a slow-worm on top of the compost.

I’m looking after you – to when I’m stationed

at the wrong end of a spyglass, clearing sheds

and bookshelves of a pink car and scooters,

Snow White, bright red lipstick and nail varnish -

when I’m slumberless in search of rhyme and rhythm,

not responding to the nightmares of young children;

when I stare at all the empty space and wonder

if it’s appropriate to watch Rastamouse alone.

 

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Laura Taylor

Fri 4th May 2012 16:39

Oh Ray, this is lovely. Fostering is such an important job. Those last 3 lines are killer. Grit/eye.

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Ray Miller

Fri 4th May 2012 14:33

Thanks, Greg, Isobel. Funny you should pick up on "to when I'm". It was added late, to make the poem more explicit. Really, I prefer just

I'm looking after you - stationed....

Yeah, it's about fostering, moving children on.

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Isobel

Thu 3rd May 2012 22:12

I'd totally echo what Greg said. I have a work colleague who fosters - letting go of the children to new parents, who are not always as skilled at raising difficult children, seems to be the most painful thing; letting go of them at all must be hard when you've formed a bond.

Your poem made me feel that ache. I think you express it all beautifully. If I was to be picky - I would just replace 'to when I'm' with 'till when I'm'

Isobel x

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Greg Freeman

Thu 3rd May 2012 13:31

Very moving, Ray. Steady, careful rhythm. I'm thinking it relates to your fostering.

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