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We're gonna miss that cat

 

Today Bella died

And yes, both of us cried

‘Though we know so much is sadder than that.

Still she was a good friend,

Dignified ‘til the end

And now, we‘re gonna miss that cat.

 

She’d warmed both our feet

Would be waiting to greet

And before you could lay down your hat,

You’d hear that great purr

Feel the rub of her fur,

Oh how we’re gonna miss that cat.

 

She was gentle of claw,

Genteel and demur

And we say this knowing it may be scoffed at

We have known none better

And we’ll never forget her

But wow, we’re gonna miss that cat

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 21st Apr 2012 16:53

Absolutely spot on. We still speak with real affection of our special 'feline friends' who have shared our family lives through the years. A good topic, and warmly written.

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Mark Mr T Thompson

Sat 21st Apr 2012 10:33

Thanks Nick

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Sat 21st Apr 2012 03:58

A toughie when moggy passes-on, a member of the family is gone. Twisting words is always the hard work but not a task that we shall shirk. Including the stumbly bits, I thought it was good, ta muchly, Nick.

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Mark Mr T Thompson

Sat 21st Apr 2012 00:48

Hi Yvonne,

Thanks for your kind words.

I have grappled a bit with those lines.

They are awkward on the page, but in a way I feel that the awkwardness is apt in those stanzas. It kind of sums up the fact that there is a self consciousness to the emotions being expressed. I can sell the lines verbally, but not without the little changes of rhythm that show although the feelings expressed are sincere, I am a little embarrassed by them.

I might still change them, but the whole piece is pretty much as I wrote it on the day (Sunday gone) and I also like the fact I was very in touch with how I felt in the moment.

Mx

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Yvonne Brunton

Fri 20th Apr 2012 00:29

A loving epitaph.
I feel that the rhythm of the 3rd line in the 1st and 3rd verses rather make the reader stumble.
How about
'Though there's much that is sadder than that.'

and
'And we know that this may be scoffed at'

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