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Day 6

It's not for the world to understand a poet,
but a poet must understand his world.

I lie here, under thick blankets,
beside a girl who was a virgin just hours before.
Scared to reach for the single glass of wine
on the bed-side table,
in fear I might drop it,
and I might break down if I saw it shatter.
Such a beautiful glass,
filled with a poison it took over twelve years to make.
Old Verdelho Madeira is sweet on the tongue
and I am shaking.
The ghost of you lingers in every idle gesture.

The new whore rouses in her sleep,
and I am burdened.

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<Deleted User> (9821)

Tue 7th May 2013 18:22

love it

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Ray Miller

Thu 19th Apr 2012 13:22

It's a good poem. I'd prefer it without the opening two lines, they're a bit "Look at me!" I think the last 7 lines are terrific. You maybe don't need idle gesture, just gesture would do.

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Thu 19th Apr 2012 12:59

Beautiful. There is a precision about the words that really struck me.

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Yvonne Brunton

Wed 18th Apr 2012 13:43

from 'the girl who was a virgin' through 'beautiful glass filled with a poison' to 'I am shaking', the tremors of dark sentiments ooze through the lines. This merits several re-reads. XX

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Laura Taylor

Wed 18th Apr 2012 09:45

Intriguing title, some really good lines in this (under thick blankets/single glass of wine/beautiful glass...loads more), and like Tommy's new piece, lends itself to interpretation wonderfully.

Fragility reigns...I'd like to hear this read out, in a totally silent room

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