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I Admit I Am Ambivalent

Sidelines.  

 

I meet the compulsion

that leads me to write

in the burgeoning day

and the gathering night

and draw, from the wings

of a turbulent stage,

impressions that litter

the waste of a page.

 

 

Me and You.  

 

I've emptied pens in vain attempts

to tie a feeling to a line, and

sought the answer to the question;

do your feelings feel like mine?

              

          

◄ An Avian Theme

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Comments

Travis Brow

Sun 1st Apr 2012 12:39

Thank you very much Innocentia, that's very kind of you.

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Sun 1st Apr 2012 09:12

great one Andy i really enjoyed it..

Travis Brow

Sat 31st Mar 2012 11:02

Thank you Yvonne, Stella and Lynn; I appreciate your comments very much. Since I've been posting work on the site I've had to accept that I'll need to raise my game, as it were. I've always taken my writing seriously and never been averse to criticism but it's mostly been a solitary pursuit. It is beneficial though to receive input from your good selves and others - it keeps me on my toes. Thanks again.

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Lynn Dye

Fri 30th Mar 2012 23:17

I enjoyed this very much, a good read.

<Deleted User> (6315)

Fri 30th Mar 2012 23:08

Yup I am pleased I came upon this Andy..very much enjoyed the rhythm and the title is great too..nice work :)

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Yvonne Brunton

Fri 30th Mar 2012 20:25

Sidelines:- Great. I like the way the rhythm flows naturally and the rhymes are unforced. (I'm quite keen on rhythm and rhyme)
Me and you:- Succinct.You have encapsulated the poet's dilemma in a couple of lines ( well 4 to be accurate if there are any mathematitians amongst us)I like them both.

Travis Brow

Fri 30th Mar 2012 12:13

Thank you gentlemen. I'm enjoying sharing, and receiving useful feedback.

I haven't got that many poems, given how long I've been at it, so I'll have to parcel them out slowly.

<Deleted User> (10123)

Fri 30th Mar 2012 11:13

I feel invigorated by the wonderful rhythms. Tripping off the tongue and brightening the mind is making my day. Ta muchly, Nick.

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