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Altars to the Gods (With better illustration)

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I once saw

an altar built

to honor a God.

Which God I

do not know.

 

The day was overcast

and threatened rain.

The years and the

elements had wrecked

havoc on this altar.

 

A mouse scurried across

this crumbling stone.

A bird of

prey swooped down

and carried away

this small creature.

A sacrifice for a God?

 

A couple

of filthy

haggard dogs

came around

begging for

a handout.

 

In years

to come

will our altars

to our Gods

fare the same?

Altars of stoneGods

◄ Altars to the Gods

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Comments

<Deleted User> (10123)

Thu 15th Mar 2012 10:13

Your choice of visual layout, is yours. You might like to reconsider and make the lines longer - your choices are open!
Right, got that off me chest now down to the verse. Hum, (honour and wreaked) them there spellings is of US descent me thinks!
Overall I liked it. Certainly enough to read it and grumble like a good 'un! Do hope I've not been too cruel.
An enjoyable verse, so Ta much,
Nick.

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