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Disparate Friends

 

Forest deep, 
forest dark,
buried secrets, 
altered spark,
four by four,
plus one left,
no one noticed,
no one bereft.
 
Months gone by,
suspicions rise,
detection maybe,
no great surprise,
move the problem,
set it deeper still,
concrete solutions,
from an iron will.
 
Still fixated,
one digs around,
amongst four people,
not in the ground,
fractured friendships,
count the cost,
another man down,
but is all lost?
 
Sat there solo,
gun close at hand,
with bottle full,
who'll understand,
in the morning,
will there be
any future
left for Bree?
 
©Rhumour
March 4th 2012

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Wed 7th Mar 2012 18:50

Hehe - ok the book is now resting alongside my keyboard Nick. :)

Thank you for your very kind comments, they are much appreciated, even though I do feel many might disagree... Best wishes - and good luck with the bottle, Dave

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Wed 7th Mar 2012 10:58

Put that book down, I'm talking!!!
You have a way with words that many must envy. Good all round. Ta much.
(You keep the gun, I'll help you out with the bottle)

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Tue 6th Mar 2012 23:22

Hehe - it is a play on the plot lines of 'Desperate Housewives' Lyn, so you need to be familiar with the characters and their exploits for all the pieces to drop into place.

Best wishes, Dave

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Lynn Dye

Tue 6th Mar 2012 21:48

I really like the flow and the lay out, Dave. Good words even if I do find it a bit puzzling.

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