centrically
one lie
sparks ire
tinder lit
faith combusts
peripherally
one truth
spreads wide
ripples out, wriggling
buffers ragged edges
throw a stone
truth or dare
skim it out
skipping sham
burns upon the palm
if you
own it in your hand
a stone has
many sides
some of them
are true
I dare you
The shape of this poem makes me think of Tadeusz Ròzewicz - good stuff
Graham
Ta Sir Black
Yeh, know what you mean re the 3rd verse. It might well come down to just that and the last bit if I send it off anywhere.
Whaddaya mean by Sonic the Hedgehog? You mean about my emphasis on sonics lately?
3.5 out of 5 ain't bad ;)
Thanks guys
That is well spooky about the burnt palm innit? I've no idea where that came from tbh, just popped into my head.
Ray - I did think about 'cast' but discarded it for the rhyme and sonics of 'throw' with stone.
The lack of symmetry is connected to the power of the truth, how it covers more ground, does more good than harm, and spreads peripherally rather than concentrating on one spot.
Next time you see a stone pick it up. They do have many sides. Plus there's tons of references with stones int there, to do with truth and judgement?
Many thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this one.
I liked the beginning. I was expecting something more symmetrical so was a bit disappointed at these lines
ripples out, wriggling
buffers ragged edges
Maybe "cast a stone"?
I like this verse, especially some of them are true.
a stone has
many sides
some of them
are true
Do stones have many sides, though?
I liked this one Tom, Its a type of imagery I have visited myself. From the philosophical end in the burnt palm and true side to the (for me) uncertainty in faith of the start. Houston.
Nice......many meanings/thoughts/visions/turns
Mike
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Barbi Touron
Fri 9th Mar 2012 18:47
I dare you!