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visual cliff

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There s a hole where the space should be

A place where the hold should have

Seen to it that the waters broke a baby

In peacefully

 

Where the swaddling clothes

Could take hold of the fever

And clear away all of the sweat

 

But terrors had already set in

In the night

All drunken in sin,

And crying for milk was a din

But for god sake

just don’t waken up Him.

 

There a caverns

Over which it could have crawled

Had this been an experiment.

 Psychologists could have noted the

 achievements of motherhood

as she stood up with child all proud in her arms

their eyes knew the ground

was safe.

 

But no one was watching

And the baby fell.

And it just a good job it got up again

For all these years later it still crying that the cranium

Has taken on too much with this life

 and the impact was deafening 

 its brain is all crushed

It don’t want to think again

 

But the only way to treat it is

Indifferent,

With personal responsibility

And the careful assistance of suicide.

psychology cured me

whoever said that?

 

 

 

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Rachel Bond

Wed 7th Mar 2012 22:35

thanks everyone for comments.
its a common mistake i think to assume everyone grows up in safety. i try to remember when im upset with someone that maybe theyre struggling with something beyond me. this poem is a bit beyond me. i just let the words out it wrote itself from some strange spot in the brain that i just might have been dropped on :)
the visual cliff experiment is a very interesting one to study.

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Barbi Touron

Wed 7th Mar 2012 19:41

This really shook me, and well well done at that, such a dark topic, I'm glad that poets such as yourself tackle them, because these are tales that need to be told. Cheers

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Laura Taylor

Mon 5th Mar 2012 12:55

Disturbing, fractured, fragmenting, and that picture scares the shite out of me. My mother dropped me on the head when I was a baby, onto paving stones. Sayin nowt.

Which is to say that I found this a very interesting and provocative write milady.

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Andy N

Sun 4th Mar 2012 18:31

enjoyed this, Rach - particularly like
'But terrors had already set in

In the night

All drunken in sin' but it's a top piece xx

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