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Breathe in please as you squeeze

Through the envelope and escape

The pigeon hole of high numbers

That lumbers and encumbers you

 

And threatens the glue that holds

The letters together to make sense

And condense the myth

Of 3 score and 10

 

Then think again, hang in there

Give the young guns a stare

And tell them you're here

Still here, no fear

 

Brains picked from old frames

Spilt beans, we're all the same

Mistakes galore

In life's pressure cooker open door

 

The hair maybe silver

But experience is gold

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OVER BY CHRISTMAS? ►

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Ray Miller

Thu 16th Feb 2012 14:16

I like the last 2 lines, I think I might have a T-shirt printed.
I was less taken with "life's pressure cooker open door" which sounds like John Motson mixing his metaphors.
I liked the squeezing through the envelope, though I don't quite get the point of that either - nice image, though.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Wed 15th Feb 2012 17:11

Top one Mike-
espesh' the last two line's
relating to the sentiment
is a piece of p**s for moi!

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Laura Taylor

Mon 13th Feb 2012 16:14

I like this. Spookily enough though, as I was driving back from the bank just now, I saw the mother of someone I knew from school, must only be your age Mike, but my god she was so downtrodden. And I thought, well, it could be anything that makes her look that way...but what if she's just reached the age/stage of just not caring, because her youthful attractiveness has gone? Bear with me I do have a point ;D That made me think 'never gonna get like that, sod being older, there's loads of great stuff about it' and then I thought of YOU!! Sat chatting in the Tudor, all enthusiastic happiness and joy, clearly not giving two flying fecks about how people may view you/us.

Sorry for waffle! I do like this poem :) (oo and ta for y'note on dyscalculia - I didn't know it was a condition for years - but was aware that I appeared to be numerically dyslexic!)

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