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February

He fields the familiar questions;  

his birthday and children contemplate presents.

One year they composed a photo’d mosaic,

a diary from warmness to winter’s decaying:

the feeding of bottles and reading of stories,

his hair set in bobbles, the family guffawing;   

teaching the beautiful game in the garden,

patiently building sandcastles and snowmen;

watching barbarians ruin his labours

as youngsters mutate and become teenagers.

His long dark waves are whitened and thinning;

this worshipping congregation has risen

as if all sins were forgot or forgiven

and he a declining church or religion

desirous of presence and honest emotion,

receiving lip-service and tiny gift tokens.

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◄ Ten Miles Too Long

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Ray Miller

Mon 13th Feb 2012 20:11

Thanks very much for the comments.

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 11th Feb 2012 16:26

I liked this wry (and slightly grumpy and begrudging) cameo Ray. The redundant patriarch silverback - a sad sight indeed!

regards,
A.E.

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winston plowes

Sat 11th Feb 2012 12:18

engaging Ray, and liked the way you used some every day phrases and half rhymes throughout without them being overpowering. Win

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 9th Feb 2012 12:20

I really enjoyed this.
"He fields the familiar questions" - what a brilliant turn of phrase.

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Mike Hilton

Thu 9th Feb 2012 12:01

A very interesting read Ray and a lovely flow about it.

Mike

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