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I find It hard to stretch my mind, I would question the motives of a saint. Nice. Instinct runs through blood, or so I'm told. I worry about my brother, My blood is pure, Just cold.

◄ Life is not longer when your lonely.

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Chris Co

Mon 30th Jan 2012 16:27

I like this M,

Blood does indeed run through instinct. Through the instinct of the fight or flight mechanism of the adrenal glands and through the instincts activated by the brain. Including the older more primitive parts of it.

I would lose the comma after 'I find' and I would also lose the capitalisation of 'Or' and would tend to go with commas thereafter. Just subjective though- well thought/written.

My Best

Chris



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