The first of January's nights

I was looking at that window thinking

there's someone I love in there - 

and she was

 

I looked at your window later

waving a thousand times - 

and yet couldn't stop

 

I'm looking at that dim lit window

as cold rain struggles to freeze white -

 

And in there are my mad life's beauties,

as I lean against the first of January's nights

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Laura Taylor

Wed 18th Jan 2012 13:34

I like the changing tense in the first lines of each verse, clever that.

I really like it as a whole...with its little clues, and ambiguity. In fact, I LOVE the ambiguity, and 'mad life's beauties' - mmm :)

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Dali

Wed 18th Jan 2012 00:14

Thanks for reading Rachel!

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Rachel Bond

Tue 17th Jan 2012 23:42

really like this x

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