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Look Back

The fall of morning tumbles gently

In a drift and glimmer

Of silver lightshade,

The glue sap sticking to the day

In the form of static.

 

Passing cars thrift an image on the wall

Of someone not looking back but

Always moving forward.

 

Ready for terror and joy.

All the wonderful things

Of which we have been warned:

 

The chokesuit and rope,

The fields of gleaming galaxies

Set in stone outside the door

Waiting for someone

To look back.

 

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Elaine Booth

Sun 18th Sep 2011 19:28

Likewise I don't get depression but possibilities. I enjoyed the imagery:
"thrift an image on the wall" is excellent. One of those you think, I wish I'd come up with that one!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 16th Sep 2011 16:04

I just like the words and their magic. The first stanza is outstanding. I do not find depression here - realism, maybe - existentialism - excitement - but not sadness.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 16th Sep 2011 10:15

This reads like the writer is depressed - not sure exactly why but there's a muffled quality to it, an 'outside' feel. It might be the last 2 lines of the first stanza that does it.

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Andy N

Fri 16th Sep 2011 08:39

nice stuff, kealan... agree with rachel over the disturbing images although my personal favourite is the 2nd stanza.. A

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