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Foreverless

I heard you mention curves

Folding the robes of your pyjamas

In the snap cold morning

With a smoke and coffee

You said you believed

In M Theory.

 

On silver coated grass we sat

Your eyes like event horizons.

The pull and tuck influence

Of words falling from your lips

Like animals from a ridge.

 

And the mist began to fill

The desperate corners of morning

You walked slowly into the smoke

And dissapeared.

 

The outline of your skeleton

Failed to shine, I knew then

You are the anti matter

That cannot be measured.

◄ Upas

Nothing Is Ugly In The Dark ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 2nd Aug 2011 11:24

'The anti-matter that cannot be measured'. Now who could ever top that ending! I find more discipline in your works now, so that your inspired ideas hit harder with a greater zing of pitch and pith.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 22nd Jul 2011 09:39

I'm really liking these recent pieces of yours Kealan. Would be interested to know if you like them too as in your biog you reckon you think you're shit. Would also be nice to know I'm not just sending my comments into the ether.

This is really evocative - I felt like winter morning, loving the reference to M theory as well...in fact, was only looking at that yesterday when writing my mirror poem.

Typo in the spelling of disappeared - one 's', two 'p's

Love these lines: The pull and tuck influence

Of words falling from your lips

Like animals from a ridge.


You are packing an awful lot of ideas and imagery in these recent poems - nice one

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