You are there
Out in the vast
As I am here
Without.
Woman of the future
I only see you
When my eyes are closed
For now.
Someday the borders
Of our distance
Shall collide.
And you won't judge me
For my teeth and posture
And I won't judge you
For you're timing.
Really enjoyed this Kealan. Complicated simplicity.
I like this one too. As Darren says, there is a depth and a deceptive simplicity that works.
darren thomas
Tue 5th Jul 2011 18:13
As with much of your poetry, there is a depth to this piece. Particularly like the line 'someday the borders of our distance shall collide'.
I think you need to replace 'you're' with 'your' to avoid anal types becoming agitated? Unless of course you're saying 'for you are timing' in which case just ignore me. I enjoy reading what you write. DT
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Andy N
Tue 5th Jul 2011 22:05
very good - this style suits you well i think.. would like to see more in this style.. would also read well live too i think