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Dawn

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You lied about your age,

Your weight and your shoe size.

I found out too late

To halt our demise. 

 

Half truths and whoppers

Comprised your diction.

No facts, just fantasy

And falsehoods and fiction. 

 

This dress? Just ten pounds,

Bought in a sale.

If your nose was Pinocchio’s

It would run off the scale. 

 

You deceived and destroyed me

At every wrong turn.

Took wallet and dignity

And left me, heartburned. 

 

So I’m both broke and broken

At the first light of morn.

In more than one way,

You were another false dawn.

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Jeff Dawson

Sat 19th Jul 2008 11:42

Hi Mark, well written, really enjoyed this although I hope you're over what happened, doesn't sound good! When I read it though apart from the deceit there still seems some hurt about your loss, it's happened though and you can't change it. Keep up the good writing! Jeff

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Sat 19th Jul 2008 02:29

Yep, i own up. I did that once!
Just the once mind you!

Very good and fairly true. Janet.
Made me smile anyway.

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Mark Niel

Fri 18th Jul 2008 09:58

Thanks Daniel. Sorry for adding to your pain by writing about it! The idea came from a silly season story about frequently told lies. It said
"The favourite fib told by women was "Of course you don't look fat" with "These shoes were only £10" in second place".
I also thought it would be interesting to write about a love you didn't regret losing.

Thanks for the encouragement

Mark

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Fri 18th Jul 2008 09:18

Hi Mark, I've got one of those! One dress costing more than my entire wardrobe. One haircut costing the same as mine for a year. Shoes ... she compalins when the soles in mine have hole in them and sends them to be repaired. Most of hers are hardly scuffed and one the cost of a single pair would put 4 sets of leather on my feet. Heck I really feel this one. Possibly more so at the moment. Good write.

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