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The War of Attrition

When the dog no more remembered

where yesterday's bones were buried,

the old girl began conversing

with her long-dead mother and father.

 

His eyesight blurred and during walks

he attached himself to strangers:

she wrote off to Her Majesty

claiming blue-blooded connections.

 

At night he would lose his bearings

and come barking into bedrooms:

she rang the railway and requested

a Return to 1940.

 

He grew too slow for sticks we'd throw

and deaf to our exhortations:

she wedged into a wheelchair tuned

to the BBC Home Service.

 

We finally had the dog put down,

he was buried in the garden:

she wore best togs and waved a flag

at the VE Celebrations. 

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John Darwin

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 13:17

an extraordinary poem, puts my attempts on a similar theme to shame.

thanks
John

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Isobel

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 12:51

I like the unsentimental way you handle this Ray and the way you compare the dog to the woman.
Your conclusion has me wondering whether it just wouldn't be better to be put down as a dysfunctional adult. Your poem doesn't handle the vile mood swings that such a person can be subjected to. My poor sister has to cope with this - sweet old dears who want to regress back to their youth are one thing - snarling old people who chuck you out and bad mouth you to all, when all you are trying to do is help - well that is something else.

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winston plowes

Wed 22nd Dec 2010 21:52

liked this , an origianl idea really well executed. (Sorry) Win X

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Chris Co

Wed 22nd Dec 2010 20:28

The connection between the two and what occurs due to age and infirmity are touching.

Good subjective fly on the wall social commentary without the need to overly explain anything or tie up any loose ends.

In terms of the language I think the first stanza is of the highest quality. It just feels right in the palatte when read aloud.

Chris

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