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Kiss, promise, tell

 

A first kiss promise,

tangibly felt through fearful lips.

Smiling eyes offer more,

more than I could pledge.

 

Clutching at sunshine,

filtered through a darkened haze.

Through your gaze, expectancy

In your spoken words, urgency.

 

Writing down lines, where tears soak paper.

Pulling apart seams, a telling intent,

packed into a case, a deliberate step.

And you know how you layer despair.

 

Through letterboxes invites are received,

to view a concocted fictional shame.

Now with resolute lips and steadfast hands

I reclaim myself from your lost property.

memory

◄ To know these lands

Mouth ►

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John Aikman

Tue 7th Dec 2010 13:30

What a fabulous last line! It draws the whole thing together and manages to be poignant, wry, funny and heartbreaking all at once.

Goodstuff.

:-)

Jx

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 5th Dec 2010 10:14

And you know how youn layer despair, great line, great poem Rachel, Jeff x

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Sat 4th Dec 2010 19:51

I think this is terrific. 'Smiling eyes offer more' – beautifully put. I like the way it ends, too. So true. 'Resolute lips and steadfast hands.' These words put you there. Lovely.

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