Invisible
How can you not see?
Standing here is me.
Now you pass me by,
Can you not see me?
Smitten from first sight,
You could never see.
Seems my destiny
You will not see me.
Hello, my name’s Lynn,
Please say you see me.
Comments
It is a very good poem.
Oh that last line is so poignant, Lynn.
I keep meaning to have a go at ghazal too - will get round to it soonish I reckon :)
Love this
Hi Lynn, It is not a Ghazal in the classical form but many modern poets have chosen to take bits and pieces of the traditional to make [what they call] a ghazal. This could perhaps fall into this category. But actually does it matter to you? If not then it doesn't matter. Win. A nice poem whether a ghazal or not :-)
Thanks Ann, you are very kind as always. xx
John, I did check the form on the web, perhaps I need to check again!
John Stuart
Tue 9th Nov 2010 20:55
This is not a ghazal. You can check up on the form on the web - the Wikipedia entry on the subject has some examples. Mimi Khalvati has written several, including a beautiful one based on a poem by Hafez.
I don't know for sure if this is a ghazal but it is a touching poem, plaintive. I keep thinking I must try a ghazal but it's been too daunting so far for me, so well done you! xx
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Lynn Dye
Tue 7th Dec 2010 18:04
Thanks to all. Ghazal style, then!