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salsa with orion

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We stumble through darkness

torches raking emerald hedges

three women off to salsa class.

 

Never been before.

Laughing and shivering

in the January night.

 

The church hall is warm and bright

the teacher young.

He tries to show us how to dance the salsa.

 

We stand in line.

It looks so easy

but I can’t do it!

I add steps that aren’t there

I’m on my right foot when it should be my left

I’m going backwards, should be off in front

 

and then . . .

we take a partner.

 

A man is holding my hand.

His palm supports my shoulder

guiding me

but I am a wayward pupil!

And I want to cry

right there, in the middle

of the salsa class

where everyone is laughing, giggling

as they should be.

But that isn’t me.

I make my excuse and I leave.

 

Back in my clumpy walking boots

walking home beneath a blueblack January sky

my old friend Orion is looking down.

“You should have stayed at home!”

he seems to say

 

and I agree.

In this cold dark empty universe

he is my one and only dancing partner

and the wisest man for me.

 

 

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Andy N

Mon 8th Nov 2010 08:19

love pieces like this where a good story is told within a piece, but not everything is told! Well done on reaching 2nd place too in the comp! x

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winston plowes

Mon 8th Nov 2010 00:20

It reminds me of being alienated by my attempts at tap dancing class! (True) nice story poem Ann. Win x

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 7th Nov 2010 17:16

I'm afraid I'm of the Isadora Duncan crossed with Shalamar school of dancing! I LOVE to dance around but I simply can't follow any steps whatsoever! I see this as being part of my creative character! Very embarrassing no doubt! xx

PS What's left and right when it's at home? Prob explains why I don't drive either!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 7th Nov 2010 16:59

The immediacy of your work is always amazing, its universal femininity a grab to the heart. This poem is terrific, so honest!

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 7th Nov 2010 10:47

Written back in January but I thought of it after reading Alison's poem. I feel more like dancing now! (Not the salsa though!)

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