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The Secret Garden

As if aware of death,

nature threw a shroud over things

best forgotten. Like the time,

sunk on Plymouth Gin,

you opened your lungs to the moon

and dashed a tumbler on the rockery.

Or when, with nerves splayed,

you flung some unloved vase

at next-door’s cat; missing,

they said, by a whisker.

 

Aware only of ourselves,

we arrived with shears and trowel,

creating order, sifting debris.

Discovering, beneath a veil of earth,

a red-brick path skirting the blossom tree,

divining amongst the knotweed -

taken root like some berserk worm -

a forgotten sense of purpose.

 

But, with each scrape and blow,

a different sort of discovery - a picture frame,

a chair leg, some inscrutable pottery.

Evidence of a life gone to seed?

What should we deduce from this random archaeology,

these unmade beds? A drink problem?

A rejected lover? A faith unravelled?

Or perhaps, as others said, you just lost the plot.

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Isobel

Tue 5th Oct 2010 20:42

Your poetry is wonderful James. It doesn't wallow - it expresses. I enjoy its subtlety and the humour is a must in life - how else do we cope?

Digging up the earth does indeed turn up all kinds of questions and unsolved pieces of jigsaw. Archaeology, even on a domestic scale, makes you realise that your whole life experience condensed is just a grain of sand or soil even. I love the thought in this. x

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James Lancaster

Tue 5th Oct 2010 17:48

Thanks for your constructive comments - I was rather hoping the humour didn't detract too much from the seriousness...but maybe it does? It just wasn't coming out 'straight' this one... Oscar Wilde once said: "He has no sense of humour, and by that I mean to impugn his seriousness..." - that's kind of what I was aiming for. x

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 5th Oct 2010 16:48

I enjoyed this a lot James, particularly the first verse. There are indeed a lot of jokes/plays on words in this poem. I would have tackled it "straight" I think, but that's just me. But you've probably added something more with your light touch.

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Ray Miller

Tue 5th Oct 2010 15:53

Good stuff. I like the idea of nature throwing a shroud and the random archaeology line is excellent.Almost a cheap laugh at the end, just the kind of thing I'd do. Alters the tone of the poem somewhat, though.Enjoyed.

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