Picnic In The Dark.

Lamplight on sand

Reflecting majesty of the sea.

Everything measured in tide

And wonder.


Moonlit silhouette

Of smoke string ribbon

Cooling on a brim

Of stars.


Ceasefire of the senses

Brush a cushioned foot

Across dune curtained outlets

Toe a line.


Distance is soundproof

Almost silent but the wind

Flickering mild suggestions

Of breeze.


Was there somebody else there?

◄ The Long Crawl.

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Andy N

Sat 21st Aug 2010 09:39

agree with cynthia.. she covers pretty well what i was going to say, but this is quality stuff, bud.. good to see you are still writing - keep em coming!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 20th Aug 2010 14:28

Vivid images - to vivid thoughts - to a moment caught vividly. Outstanding are 'smoke string ribbon cooling on a brim of stars' and 'ceasefire of the senses' etc. I really liked the formatting also: a small effort for such big effect. The single line turn at the end is very emphatic, and exciting.

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