Flyntland

GIVING IN - - AND GIVING UP

by Flyntland

Friday 21st February 2025 12:47 pm

I've grown weary of being shouted at,

this shed is mine, I know my rights,

I should be free to enter

without sitting tenant fights

discussions or discordant voices.

And yet it's I who apologizes

as I subserviently creep away,

backing out of the door

as though afraid of an affray.

I give in - give up and acquiesce

to this outraged bully who controls

that which I own, and which,

under duress, has been permitted

to make this place his home.

Now I enter at my peril,

this tiny wren, when angered,

is like the offspring of the devil.

🌷🌷(12)

◄ FOR ANNIE

FLINT LANDS ►

Comments

Flyntland

Sun 23rd Feb 2025 12:21

RBK. Tom D., Holden, Marla, Naomi, and Tom M.
Thank you one and all for your kindness in reading and pressing the flower button.

Flyntland

Sun 23rd Feb 2025 11:06

Thank you Stephen, I value your comments.

Flyntland

Sun 23rd Feb 2025 11:03

Helene Thank you for your comment, I am passionate about the wildlife that lives on 'my patch' and the wrens are great characters.

I love the description of being "pissed off - small but free flying - creating a nest where her sovereignty will be respected.

I am rather short, a bit rounder than I would like to be, I prefer privacy but become fiercely protective over the inhabitants of 'my patch'.
We have about four acres, some grazed, and the rest dedicated to wildlife, some of which think that the 'patch' is theirs.

Flyntland

Sun 23rd Feb 2025 10:44

Thank you David, I think that I have shot myself in the foot.

My poem is about a wren family. They have nested for several years in the shed, and we welcome their presence and are pleased to be able to offer them shelter all year round
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We also welcome the swallows who return every year to raise two broods in a stable (the horse does not mind)

What I have done with my poem is the absolute opposite of what I wanted to say- why did I not see that? duh!

On a very sad note, we used to have four pairs of swallows nesting here, each having two broods, we are now reduced to just one pair.

Stephen Gospage

Sun 23rd Feb 2025 07:30

A really good poem, Flyntland. The last three lines are intriguing, and terrifying! Sentiments conveyed so clearly and concisely.

Hélène

Sat 22nd Feb 2025 15:03

A powerful poem, and all the more interesting when read w/ the comments. We could sit in a class and discuss the poet's possible meaning, the meaning to a particular reader, etc. This is the joy of writing & sharing! Gratitude to WOL administrators, poets, readers & commentators.

Another possible interpretation of the poem: the narrator is pissed off, fed up, but resigned. Becoming as a wren (small but free-flying), she will find a way to channel the fury, will find a way to create a nest where her sovereignty will be respected.

David RL Moore

Sat 22nd Feb 2025 08:53

Good morning Flyntland,

A humourous and interesting little parable.

It illustrates one of the better aspects of human nature, that of respecting the rights of species that don't adhere to our made up rules of ownership and territory...and that are happily oblivious to them.

On another note, it is interesting to me that with words firmly on the page which describe the situation in detail they are still unseen, not even misinterpreted but reinterpreted to reflect the readers expectation.

This can be a disappoinment to the author especially if time has been taken to create the piece of writing. It also shows the dangers of misinterpriting the written word, for example, Media and Social Media in all its fragile forms.

David RL Moore

Flyntland

Fri 21st Feb 2025 20:35

Thank you Naomi

Flyntland

Fri 21st Feb 2025 20:34

Dear Rolph and Tom

I know my place

thank you for reading and for the advice.

Rolph David

Fri 21st Feb 2025 17:06

Dear Flyntland,
Thank you for sharing your powerful poem. The words really speak to me, capturing the frustration and despair the lyrical I is facing. I admire your courage in expressing such raw emotion, and I hope you know that your words have a lasting impact.
I truly hope everything turns out fine in the end, and that the "bully" or "intruder" gets what’s coming to him—may he face the consequences of his actions.
Please take care, and know that others hear you and appreciate the vulnerability you’ve shown.
Kind regards,
Rolph

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