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OPAQUE

 

I gaze into the pool -

the pool gazes back,

a dark unblinking eye,

surface perfectly flat.

No ripples or reflections,

a natural sump

a bitter cup.

 

Almost round

with sloping sides

no iris or reeds 

to soften its banks,

no dragonflies

or bathing birds,

just dark, brown black

surface perfectly flat.

 

Above the pool

mosquitoes dance

a hovering mist

of frenzied flight,

no shadows cast,

no tricks of light,

just peat brown ooze,

unmoved by life.

 

I gaze into the pool -

the pool gazes back,

a dark unblinking eye

surface perfectly flat. 

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Flyntland

Sun 16th Feb 2025 16:52


R.A. Porter, Many thanks for 'looking back' reading and commenting on this poem.
You are right—this pool is menacing, ageless, and in an oozing shallow bog—but unfathomable. It has swallowed plenty but reveals nothing and will continue doing so till long after after we have gone.
It was not a comforting poem.

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R A Porter

Sun 16th Feb 2025 14:16

There is a powerful atmosphere to this poem, it sounds beautiful, menacing and still 🙌

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Flyntland

Thu 30th Jan 2025 19:59

Nigel. RBK. Tom and Hugh thank you so much for reading and for
liking.
Stephen G., Stephen A. and Holden thank you, likes are so important and encouraging.

and finally, K.Lynn and Naomi thank you also for reading and pressing that little button.

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