Off the Hook

Friday 16th July 2010 4:47 pm

I caught you on my line

Reeled you in,

Gave you my time.

You flapped around

And slipped from my grasp

Refused to let me sink my float

So I'm cutting you loose

Throwing you off my boat

Into the sea

Where there's plenty of fish

But none for me.

I think I use the wrong bait.

Comments

Sat 17th Jul 2010 16:58

Great sustained metaphor. I enjoyed this, funny and precise.

<Deleted User> (6484)

Fri 16th Jul 2010 17:39

flows well, quite a good write

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