The sun shines bright this day, the sky is so still
Flowers bloom ,in the distance a hill
Horses grazing in the field,golden wheat the farmer will yield
Country lane soiled baked with heat
Cows swishing tails ,green grass they eat
Dogs in yard of cottage painted white
Washing on rope,lady on chair
Reading her book , resting herself
My lunchbreak over,back to city life
Memories of a perfect day,hanging on the ...ART GALLERY WALL
Very nice Bernadette.. Enjoyed reading this - you may want to consider removing these two lines near the end as I am not sure if they are needed 'Reading her book , resting herself
My lunchbreak over,back to city life' as I am not 100% convinced they are really needed.
Enjoyed this however. I know you go to Steve O's group.. Have you showed him this yet? I reckon knowing Steve he'll enjoy this!
<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 14:09
Constable would have approved of this poem for sure Bernadette,as I am-ta chuck-Steffo-xx
thank you Jacqueline for your comment . Glad you like it.
<Deleted User> (8394)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 13:48
Love the twist in this Bernadette, brilliant idea.
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Graham Sherwood
Sun 11th Jul 2010 11:31
Hello Bernadette, I think the idea of this is a lovely wistful daydream. I think it needs to sound more lyrical, almost like a song that then gets abruptly turned off.