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High Tide - 10.47

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Above the beach

the heather is purple on the clifftop.

The tide is in.

 

Red and yellow flags stand sentinel.

No one is in the sea.

The sky - a woolly grey.

The sea a demon.

Soon the rain will come.

 

We sit on rocks.

What sand there is, too wet.

Everyone looks out to sea.

To a chaos of waves.

An anarchy of raging water.

If you were out there you’d not last for long.

 

We sit, mesmerised,

and almost fearful

deafened by the roar

hypnotised

by a power so much greater.

Maybe we look death right in the face

trying to stare it out.

An eternity of ocean.

 

It's high tide - 10.47

 

A depression deepens from the west.

 

 

 

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 8th Jul 2010 20:02

Winston - you are so right! xx

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winston plowes

Thu 8th Jul 2010 19:59

Liked this one ann. Tyne, dogger german bight ;-) Nice last line. didn't see it in its earlier form. I hope the comments herehave been useful. They really have been for me in the past when (for instance) Graham has slotted the last piece into a jigsaw of a poem that made it complete. I would like to think that once you make some contacts on here WOL is capable of this. x

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Lynn Dye

Tue 6th Jul 2010 21:10

I liked this before, Ann, but feel it is perfect now. xx

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 4th Jul 2010 18:31

Not sure about purpling . . . But may remove all the time checks! Got to the beach this morning and the RNLI board always has the tide times. 10.47 sounded like a good title. So I jotted it down sitting on a rock - not my special rock as that was still underwater!

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Sun 4th Jul 2010 17:29

The heather and the fluttering safety flags make a good contrast to an otherwise somber and threatening vista. I think the contrast is well defined, an atmospheric and chillingly brooding piece of work. The purpling heather in the North Yorkshire moors are beautiful in late summer.
TCX

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Lynn Dye

Sun 4th Jul 2010 17:21

I like purpling the hillside, but then what do I know? Lol. Good poem again, Ann x

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 4th Jul 2010 16:13

There are so many good and bad things about this Ann.
I think that you have diluted your killer last line by using it twice before. I hate the thought of heather "purpling" but love the chaos of waves. I think "if you were there you wouldn't last long" is clumsy but really like the woolly grey sky and the thought of staring down the raging ocean. As always Ann thoughtful stuff.

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