Hear the faint chimes
Sapphic stanza: 4 lines - consisting of 3 lines of 11 syllables each (hendecasyllabics) each measured in the same strictly prescribed feet - /,///,,/,/, and the final prescribed line using 5 syllables - /,,//
Hear the faint chimes, music of nodding bluebells,
Tinkling-glass tones trembling on restless breezes,
Soundless wild blue notes from the woodland shadows.
God ringing prayer bells.
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hi Cynthia - thanks for the explanation you left on my profile. You should post a copy here also - so that people might have some idea of the rigours you are writing under. I had no idea it was so complicated - such a hard thing to do but worth it, for that sense of achievement at the end! x
Lovely Cynthia - you are leading the way with these structured poems.
I would have been tempted to go for 'trembling on the restless breeze' rather than breezes - no idea why - just prefer the sound of it.
Think I'd also prefer 'wild blue notes sounding from the woodland shadows'
Love the last line! x
well done Cynthia.. I really wouldn't have fancied tackling that.. Good Stuff - the 3rd line is my favourite! x
Beautiful Cynthia!
I can hear it...
This was difficult, surprisingly so. All input welcome to keep me on my toes.
Isobel suggested I include the prescribed 'feet':
lines 1,2 and 3:
/, // /,, /, /,
line 4: /,, //
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Wood
Mon 16th Apr 2018 02:26
hello
really enjoyed your words spoken so clear.
thanks for sharing.