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The village

I have left a village where people don't -

come together, even for a valid reason,

compete, in a more healthier manner, 

appreciate, even a better contribution, 

spare conscience, for our own children,

believe, in a solidarity of our character,

remember, a purpose of our existence, 

spend time, upon fulfilling good intentions, 

feel and try, to empathise with others, 

make a way, for a better humanistic culture, 

reside peacefully, in a charming nature's temple,


because, my Lord, this time,

please let me serve you better,

and let my poetry be its vehicle.

 

 

 

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Dr. Kishore R. Nikam

Mon 8th Jun 2020 04:57

Hello Adam Whitworth,
Although Art does not reach perfection ever, I have worked upon your suggestions. Actually, during the process of creating, I remained unaware of certain things. Thanks for your valuable remarks which made me more careful about my efforts. Please keep conversing.

Dr. Kishore

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Dr. Kishore R. Nikam

Sun 7th Jun 2020 16:30

Hreatfelt thanks, Manisha Saini, for hitting a like!

Dr. Kishore

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Dr. Kishore R. Nikam

Sun 7th Jun 2020 11:01

Thank you, Moon.girl and Adam Whitworth, for your kind attention...

Dr. Kishore

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Sun 7th Jun 2020 10:18

I liked the theme. Good decision taken at the right time. Just stay safe n happy....keep exploring life as it comes to enrich your experiences.

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Adam Whitworth

Sun 7th Jun 2020 09:55

I endorse the sentiment of this poem. Bravo, nice write, well done and thank you.

For me, the poem suffers from bad phrasing in a number of places.
Fortunately, a simple spot of editing could end the suffering.

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Dr. Kishore R. Nikam

Sun 7th Jun 2020 08:31

Hi Plilipos,

thank you, for your heartfelt like for 'The village' ...

Dr. Kishore

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Dr. Kishore R. Nikam

Sun 7th Jun 2020 07:46

Thanks a lot, Po!
Your comments throughly drenched me in a charismatic energy...happy to see still there are people who feel, no words...

Dr. Kishore

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