Nice... interesting with all the Tick-Click's...
I like that each line is direct...
I could visualise this quite well.

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Original item by alan barlow

thanks for the comments ladies it was one of my first "serious" pieces from a couple of months ago.

and sian everything gets easier with time not that we realise it all of the time, more so now its "out there"

Comment is about that night (blog)

Original item by alan barlow

Hi Alan,
Good stuff.
It even captured the deadly stillness of the night before ' a distant wail creeps over the horizon, and then screaming lights and horrified faces'

Really good.
Janet.x

Comment is about that night (blog)

Original item by alan barlow

Hi Alan, thanks so much for your comments on my piece..."This"- a bit painful to write but there you go, it's out now and not inside churning around. The whole 'car crash' scene of your piece is graphic and vivid and conveys the sheer destruction not only of the vehicles but the lives of the people inside them. Great stuff. Sian X

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Original item by alan barlow