There's some nice stuff in this but I did find it a bit disjointed. You start off with something of a regular rhyme which eventually is abandoned entirely.I think the last 2 verses are best, actually, though "a lullaby of lsd" pulled me up sharp. D'you mean £sd? I think the poem would benefit if you scrapped the 2nd verse or at least whittled it down a lot.

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Do like the last two lumps the most, The whole story is enjoyable to say the least. Thankyou for sharing and brightening my overcast morning. Ta muchly, Nick.

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A remarkable, heart-warming story, Nick, skilfully told.

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