These stores are now known as car boot sales! Take care, Tony.

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I'm obviously almost a dinosaur - i should have twigged to the 'sonnet form' by the stanza set-up, but I missed the clear rhymes as signposts. I have yet to tackle one; maybe this summer.

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Hi Greg I like this one and what interests me is the sound play in the lists. Obviously alliteration, but there are more subtle effects with the vowels chiming with each other. I don't have a problem with lines 6 & 7, but maybe line 5 is a little flatter than the rest for my ears and needs a tweak.

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Hi Greg, its all pondstretcher, poundworld etc now!! No Pick n Mix in there!! Cheers Jeff

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Thanks very much for your suggestions, Cynthia. You're right, it is a bit shambolic, as is most of my poetry, but the trouble is, it's meant to be a sonnet, and so removing lines 6 and 7 would put me in breach of the trades descriptions act!

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I like the sentiment. Saying it has 'potential' sounds so snarky, but it is what I do think. I know the lack of 'form' is implicit with the Woolie's idea of harum-scarum goods for sale, but I still think it could be, as a poem, more organized to fully express your thought. I would drop lines 6 and 7 of the first stanza as an example. I don't see what they contribute to encapsulate your idea.

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This is a bit out of date now, because a lot of the old stores are no longer unoccupied. But I still miss Woolies!

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