Moral High Ground

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I feel serene, I feel sure,

I feel I couldn't ask for more

and from this most exalted place

I can see a crisp landscape

where everything seems good and pure

and nowhere now is in the shade

but a glorious light drenches every glade

and each blade of grass stands proud and true.

I look down as the naked earth's revealed

and a celebration song pours from the sky

lifting dancing spirits high.

◄ Anniversary

Lonely tonight ►

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Thu 29th Apr 2010 19:10

On re-reading after a few days I totally take your point and may well re-visit. Thank you for your courage in feeding back, it is genuinely appreciated.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 27th Apr 2010 21:54

Hello Alison, I've kept coming back to this and keep waiting for some other feedback to see if they agree with my thoughts. No luck so here goes.
I found occasional rhyming a bit hard to get my teeth around (sure more, shade glade etc) when other lines didn't. Your feelings of lightheadedness balance nicely with the lofty subject matter too.It's clever work. I imagine the photo is preciously relevant but I think it takes away from the writing. Keep it going Alison.

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