Staying in

Anxious and tried

Head lowered in shame

I can't face my face

Again and again 

Brooding dark doubt 

Sapped energy am tired 

Confidence is ebbing 

No company desired 

◄ Shouting !

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Don Matthews

Sat 19th Oct 2019 23:11

Phillip - I have a flippant side but also wear my heart on my sleeve..... keep writing how you feel.....

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 19th Oct 2019 22:58

Write what you feel Philip. That will always be good enough in my book.

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raypool

Sat 19th Oct 2019 22:35

I find not only no fault with the poem but that it exactly expresses a state of mind. What more can you do to please some readers who are averse to accepting good poetry at face value when they see it?

Ray

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Philip Stevens

Sun 13th Oct 2019 12:46

Thank you for your encouragement of words

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Don Matthews

Sun 13th Oct 2019 12:27

I'm pooting down just wot I feel
I pleesing? wot yoo fink?
How am I dooing WOLers?
Or am I down the sink?

Please send helpfull criticisisums. I'm a lerner and need all the help I can gett

Yors
New WOL
Lerning poett 😎

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Ruth O'Reilly

Sun 13th Oct 2019 12:18

Tried and Tired are in many respects 2 sides of the one coin at the best of times. I bet you felt both after the comments BUT please don't tire of writing your feelings, it's the best medicine always... Sometimes there is something about just putting down how it felt, rather than what may be pleasing to others. You invoked reactions, that is the main thing!

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Philip Stevens

Sun 13th Oct 2019 11:50

Well I tried

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Don Matthews

Sun 13th Oct 2019 10:56

I'm tired of being tried
By all you WOLer lot
I think I'll put a comma
Where I should put a dot

And WOLers that will stir your pot
You can't comma a dot
This is a top-notch poet site
What are you thinking, wot? 😎

I tried......but a tad tired

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Philip Stevens

Sun 13th Oct 2019 10:28

How about that tried for tired, tired for tried...init bruv'

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Brian Maryon

Sun 13th Oct 2019 09:34

Like it Phil, but it dies noed charging to 'tired' itherwise it diesn't wirk.

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Philip Stevens

Sun 13th Oct 2019 07:29

But you know the typo works ...

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Philip Stevens

Sun 13th Oct 2019 07:28

Think your right/write Don and thanks for reading

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Don Matthews

Sun 13th Oct 2019 04:05

I really like this Philip. Short, succint. Nice rhyming. Should 'tried' in 'Sapped energy am tried ' be 'tired' ? Maybe not?....

I like this line 'I can't face my face'...

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