SHADOWS

 

Shadows drifting

silently shifting

announce the day

come what may

 

Vows all broken

words unspoken

a slim gold ring

a wedding token

 

Lies dicarded 

on the floor

remnant from 

the night before

 

Love is dying

she is crying

i am lying

in shadows

 

 

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trevor homer

Thu 11th Jul 2019 10:40

Thanks for your always insightful comments Ray. T.

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raypool

Wed 10th Jul 2019 12:37

Hi Trevor. What stands out to me is the almost hypnotic pattern of the words, like teardrops falling - and how shadows are a good metaphor for the dark doom of the piece, also how real seems the ring and what it should stand for. (no guarantee). The last line is like a dark refuge.

Ray

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